Roasting Marshmallow
As the fire started up i started jumping up and down.
Me my brother to and mum get to have homemade hamburgers but the was 8:00 pm before we got cook the marshmallows.
" mm yum" i said my first marshmallow was delicious it was gooy on ythe inside and on the outside it was golden.
By Toby
hi toby i liked how you used some dialouge in your writing
ReplyDeletenext time mabye use some verbs james
i liked the way you discribed the marshmallow
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ReplyDeleteI like how you described the marshmallow as goey and golden
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I like the way you said you started jumping up and down.
ReplyDeleteTry next time try and use more adjectives
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The way you said the marshmallow was gooey really captured my attention!!!
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from Megan
Thank You Guys
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