THE BOAT
VROOM! air wooshed through my blonde hair then the man said"who wants to watcher?"I said "I will". Then the man told me to sit on this bit of metal at the front of the boat.We did a really sharp turn and the freezing spray hit me!
THE END BY MICHAEL
star I like how you used interesting adjectives
ReplyDeletewish to use punctuation
by eli
i liked how you discribed the freezeing cold water
ReplyDeletei like how you used the word vroomi
ReplyDeletei like how you said freezing spray hit me!
ReplyDeletewish mabye use some verbs
james